Essay Feedback Response

The criticism on the essay was very helpful.  It did express a lot of what I have felt and heard before about my writing, but wasn't ready to deal with.

From all of it I have a few new goals/resolutions to put to work

- stay away from ambiguous language

- provide more concrete examples and illustrations

- prune away ideas that could distract from the purpose of the writing

- create clear divisions between points

- summarize after illustrating or tangents